Is this a perfect letter to be sent out?
Hello, is this below letter is perfectly written? Is there any grammar mistakes need to be done? If there is, is there any good samaritan can re write it or prefect it for me. I owe you a million thanks! TQ Here is the letter: The Air/Freight/Courier Dispatch Manager, Dear Sirs: I obtained your contact details from > http://www. Kindly, review of your accounting records, and if you have noticed that you have spent a rather large amount of money simply for courier or air freight fees recently, mainly by your clients/customers ordering items in small quantities repeatedly. We merely are suggesting the cost of forwarding through courier or air freight often-ordered parts, spares or products by your clients who are in Malaysia, Thailand, etc to multiple addresses overseas, can be quite high. We have a proposal that can help you to save a lot of revenue on courier or airfreight charges you are spending. We are very much interested to purchase in bulk the spares, parts or products often ordered by , mainly by your clients/customers in small quantity repeatedly and resell it to your clients. This type of customer service can help us to make significant savings for your company. It is very economical, simple, and efficient to service your existing or new customers from a base in Malaysia. We also have the capacity to purchase your product stocks in volume, and we can forward using cheaper courier rates to your potential customers in neighbouring countries, which include: Thailand; Singapore; Indonesia; Philippines, should you receive inquiries from those regions. Try us out, and we have no doubt that you will be pleased with the results! We appreciate your business and wish our inter-company relationship to continue and be beneficial to both of our companies. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely,
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yup,it's about right. in the end maybe change to: Kind Regards? Looks better that way.
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Kindly, review is a bit demanding. You don't need the comma or the word for and because you have asked a question by using if, that sentence really needs an answer. Perhaps- "You might have noticed from your accounting records that the cost of courier or air freight fees has increased recently, particularly if your clients reorder small quantities." And conventionally, if you address Dear Sir, you end Yours faithfully and if you address by name or title, you end Yours sincerely. Hope this helps.
